Meeting Critiques

Each month songs of members are critiqued at the 1st Thursday workshop. Winners each month are published in Songwriters Notes. Members only may enter up to 2 songs per month (or more if time allows) by going to this link https://dallassongwriters.org/song-critique/ to enter the lyric and audio file or you may upload the lyric and perform the song live at the meeting. Time is limited to the review of 8 songs per meeting on a first come basis. (If we run out of time, the songs will be moved to next meeting). Members will have until the end of November to rewrite and record their song before it is sent to the judge. At the end of each year, the songs are judged by industry pros and the Song of the Year is awarded to the songwriter whose song garnered the most points from the judges. Also, The Vern Dailey Songwriter of the Year Award goes to songwriter who has the most songs with the highest points in the top ten. Winners are announced at the Virtual Awards Program in February which include performances by the finalists.

Friday, January 24, 2020

2019 Best Songs Of The Meeting Semifinalists and Winners

2019 SONG OF THE YEAR SEMIFINALIST
THE STORY OF BONNIE and CLYDE - Barbe McMillen
WATERING HOLE - Harry Hewlett
 MONAHANS by Randy Overton
I FOUND LOVE by David Lewis
RED YELLOW BLACK AND WHITE - Harry Hewlett
SANTA ALWAYS HIT EAST TEXAS LAST - Don Wall
GONNA LOVE ON YOU - Harry Hewlett
HE LOOKED LIKE WAYLON BUT SOUNDED LIKE CASH - Rickey Gene Wright
I NEVER CRIED - Rio King
MADISON ELIZABETH'S DAY - David Lewis
THE MUSIC WAS A MIRACLE - Alexis Tapp
THOUGHTS OF YOU - Barbe McMillen


WINNER OF BEST SONGS OF THE MEETING

SONG OF THE YEAR

THE STORY OF BONNIE AND CLYDE - Barbe McMillen

VERN DAILEY SONGWRITER OF THE YEAR AWARD - Harry Hewlett


















Jack Allday - judge, Barbe McMillen, Harry Hewlett


The Story of Bonnie and Clyde ©2019 Barbara McMillen

You've heard the story of Jesse James Of how he lived and died

If you're still in need

Of some outlaw deeds
Here's the story of Bonnie and Clyde

Now Bonnie and Clyde and the Barrow gang 

Were said to be worth their weight in lead
Oh they’d rob and steal

And those who squealed

Were usually found dying or dead


Well you can’t believe, the fake news
 

The gang wasn’t so ruthless as that

Their nature was raw

And they hated the law
 Stool pigeons, spotters, and rats

CHORUS. 
Oh yeah, Oh yeah
Doodle doodle, what’ll they do? On a wild ride
Needin’ a place to hide
That’s the story of Bonnie and Clyde


They were called cold, cold-blooded killers
 

It was said they were heartless and mean

But Bonnie said with pride

That she once knew Clyde

When he was honest, upright and clean

But the law fooled around, kept taking him down
 

And locking him up in a cell

Till he said to Bonnie,

"I'll never be free,

So I'll meet a few of ‘em in hell."


A newsboy said, to his associate,

"I wish old Clyde would get jumped


In these awful hard times

We'd make a few dimes

If five or six cops would get bumped."


CHORUS
OH! Oh yeah, Oh yeah
Doodle doodle, what’ll they do?
On a wild ride
Needin’ a place to hide
That’s the story of Bonnie and Clyde

Some people have suffered, from heart-break
 

From weariness some people have died

But take it all in all

Our troubles are small
 
Compared to Bonnie and Clyde. 

If a copper was bumped, in Big D
 

And they have no clue or guide

If they couldn’t find a fiend

They just wiped their slate clean
 
And blame it on Bonnie and Clyde 

There were two crimes, in the USA
 
Not credited to the Barrow mob

They had no hand

In the kidnap demand

Nor the Kansas City depot job


CHORUS
OH! Oh yeah, oh yeah
Doodle doodle, what’ll they do?
On a wild ride
Needin’ a place to hide
That’s the story of Bonnie and Clyde


BRIDGE 
The Times hadn’t gone to press 
With the crime report yet
When Clyde called Bonnie one day 
He said, "Don't start any fights 
We ain't working nights
We're joining the NRA."

From over in Irving, to West Dallas viaduct
 

Was known as the Great Divide

Where the women were kin

And the men were men

And they didn’t "stool" on Bonnie and Clyde


If they tried to act, like honest citizens
 

And rent them a cozy little flat

About the third night

They were invited to fight
 
By a sub-gun's rat-tat-tat
They didn't think they were too tough, or desperate,
 
They knew that the law always wins

They’d been shot at before

But they could not ignore
 
That death is the wages of sin

CHORUS
OH! Yeah! Oh yeah!
Doodle doodle, what’ll they do?
On a wild ride
Needin’ a place to hide
That’s the story of Bonnie and Clyde


The road was winding, and so dimly lit
 

There were no highway signs to guide

But they made up their minds

If all roads were blind

They wouldn't give up till they died 


The road got dimmer, and dimmer
 

So dark you could hardly see

But they fight man to man

And do all they can

For they know they can never be free 


And in the end, they went down together
 

But they weren’t buried side by side

To few there was grief
To the law a relief
That’s the story of Bonnie and Clyde

Online audio link coming 


SONGWRITER OF THE YEAR - HARRY HEWLETT



















Michael Brandenberger presenting Harry Hewlett with the Songwriters of The Year Award

JUDGES COMMENTS
FROM:  Jack Allday
  SUBJ:  2019 Song Critiques

It was a privilege and a pleasure to be chosen to review the 2019 DSA song submissions.  Each of the songs I heard had its strengths, and it is encouraging to see so much talent devoted to the very difficult craft of songwriting.

The best submissions this year tended to be what might be called “novelty tunes,” as opposed to the more classical love songs.  In reviewing the 32 submissions, I looked for something that was special or stood out in each one:  a striking melody, lyric that told a story, a sense of humor, approach that touched on the human condition.  The submission receiving the only score of 10 very much told a story, and did so with a lyric that was clever but direct, and offered at a tempo that was a perfect complement to the narrative of the lyrics.  The tune receiving nine points dealt with a piece of Americana most of us can relate to, and the tune that scored eight points featured a lyric that was compelling and believable.  

Listening to these submissions reminded me of how terribly difficult it is to write a good song, and why so many evergreens are the work of not a single writer, but a team of two collaborators.

Thanks again for allowing me to participate in this important DSA initiative.  It was an enjoyable, instructive exercise.

Cordially,

JACK ALLDAY

BEST SONGS OF THE MEETING CRITIQUES

Each month songs of members are critiqued at the 1st Thursday meeting. Songs that are critiqued each month are published in Songwriters Notes. Members only may enter by uploading lyric and audio file to https://dallassongwriters.org/song-critique/ or you may upload the lyric and perform the song live at the meeting. Members will have until the end of November to rewrite and record their song before it is sent to the judge. At the end of each year, the songs are judged by industry pros and the Song of the Year is awarded to the songwriter whose song garnered the most points from the judges.
Also, The Vern Dailey Songwriter of the Year Award goes to songwriter who has the most songs with the highest points in the top ten.